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Re: Heart Strings
Your smile fades into a frown Her eyes are turned down Lifes all going wrong tonight Dreams have got you tossing and turning You have mental photographs burning In your ...
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Heart Strings
Your smile fades into a frown Her eyes are turned down Lifes all going wrong tonight Dreams have got you tossing and turning You have mental photographs burning In your ...
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: White prison
Writers block, got to love it. This poem really caputred my attention with its title because the first thing I think of when I read or hear "white room" is ...
May 23, 2009 -
Re: Flaws
Flaws Flaws are something that cannot be corrected, changed or fixed; they are a part of everyone and everything. Flaws that an individual can see in themselves is often unseen ...
May 23, 2009 -
Re: Want to be! (Hard Rock)
your anger definitely comes through in this the chorus is great, but maybe only put " i only want to be the strongest sentinel, i only want to be the ...
May 23, 2009 -
Re: This is not a fairytale
Its a good start maybe try and make a few of the lines flow in together more because at points you will find it getting choppy. Other than that I ...
May 23, 2009 -
Re: Black
Black hawks waiting, searching for their prey, black haunting songs sung, not fearing the day These two lines are stron on their own, but they don't relate together. The repition ...
May 23, 2009
