LemonadeKiss

Scythemeister, I would take further issue with your assessment that "the poor remain poor" should be changed to "the poor remain in heavy povery"%u2014isn't that saying the same thing twice? ...

MJ, Thank you for taking the time to review this! Luka's past experiences are meant to be more than just a throwaway mention, and I only wanted to drop a ...

Your suggestions were excellent, and I have fixed all the errors you pointed out. Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to review.