Leja

Rainforest Red!

Actually, we have a whole forum for it! Here's a link to all that madness:

It was dark as Connie was passing the river. :shrug: not too exciting.

Agh, I'm only at 50! [well, I've only been writing for a few minutes, too...] And if you don't want to see red, then type in Notepad instead of Microsoft ...

(1) Like others said, avoid personalizing it: don't project the author onto the narrator. Just remember to look at it objectively. Though this should be so in whatever you crit, ...

^ random tangents. Like filibustering using the telephone book XD

Twit: when there are two phrases that should have a conjunction between them but don't. Wikipedia has some good examples:

I count that in two jumps from today, my finger will end up on the calandar block for NaNo in my planner. Hence, there are two days left until NaNo! ...

The cat was called Sam, it sat on the mat. I'm a little confused... there shouldn't be a comma here. If anything, there should be a semicolon --> "...called Sam; ...

It sounds like you can't finish anything because nothing you've described has conflict. That said, this is the one that caught my eye: All About The Fire, Dead Signals and ...

Said is a wonderful thing. *wonders if I should have changed my username to Said...XD* Too many synonyms for it give me a headache. And remind me of elementary school ...

It's rather hypnotizing too...

2/10 ugh; I can't stand the Simpsons

This isn't quite a book review, so I shall move it to... Randomness, I suppose. *moved*

I'll assume you've seen Edward Scissorhands, as that's your username? Cool movie. Poetry is fun! I'm rather fond of it :D Sooo... I'll see you around! -Amelia