Leja

^ This week's NaNo guest, in case you usually skip over this section, who's leading a class of first graders in NaNoWriMo. (Aww!) :D

I think this would be better without the rhyme. Personally, I wouldn't say a bass roars at all. And I don't think there's enough expansion here to justify letting the ...

I found alot of these phrases to be of the overused, devoid of meaning type. "I feel numb" What does it mean to feel numb? It's a word used so ...

Really, now, snowglobes always sit on the wrong side of the bookshelf's ledge edge They slide thin between books, they tip through the wall; They cycle up and around, insulation ...

The second one's pretty in sepia, but it does look too myspace-y.

I thought that the rhyming words at the beginning of each stanza were an interesting idea, but it was too obvious that they're meant to stand out. Much cooler if ...

Cute dog, but something about the hat looks kind of blurry. I also think there's too much background.

Like you can't summarize it, Sumi, I don't know if I can comment on it. All I can say is I can't believe that anything can be done, legal-wise, and ...

Sounds like fun! I like poetry the most, currently, but I'm doing a novel for NaNoWriMo. Are you a prose or poetry kind of person?

Excuse me, gadi? :P

Thanks for the suggestion, Fireweed! I love her voice, and it's a lovely style :D

Having rain be blatantly related to cleansing and such is... overdone. You might also want to consider trying this without the rhyme scheme. Peace is a dove who spreads peace ...

I don't think this is quite the kind of thing you can search for on the Google.

I adore your descriptions. You certainly have an ear for them because there's a lovely balance of description and action. The only thing that stood out was this phrase: She ...

You should try rewriting this without the rhyme scheme because it makes the rhythm a little strange. The rhyme becomes all I can concentrate on, rather than the actual content ...