Leja

I didn't like the third line of each set, that told what you say/tell/fight/cry/send, etc. It seemed like unnecessary elaboration that in all, didn't have much relevance to the poem ...

It's cute that it rhymes, and the ending message is nice, I suppose, but ultimately, the poem is handed to the reader on a silver platter, no work at all ...

The rhyming isn't an asset to this poem; I think it should be rewritten without it. I think that the first two stanzas could set the last one up very ...

but the people who after they have learned ‘why the sky is blue’ still really wonder. I don't know if this is or isn't relevant to the monologue, but I ...

Is this something that you wrote yourself, or something that you heard somewhere else? Paragraphs would be helpful, otherwise my eyes just tend to skim through the middle. Maybe list ...

Certain phrases made me think it was a college essay, even if I hadn't read the title. Such as "the pursuit of a post-secondary education can be triumphed" and "many ...

This seemed more like prose with line breaks("The sun is finally creeping out with her splendid face.Funny isn’t it?/ How the sun always comes out." and "The ocean draws near. ...

Bah, of course. Very Happy We'll have to finish the story then, too. True that! :D

Oh cool, I was just looking at your original post in Writers Corner ^_^ Please excuse me if I don't critique in Spanish, but... that could severely hinder the process ...

But when is it being made official? Now! Because I say so :D Good game, Monkeys; 100:90 even makes for a close game! Who's up for a rematch next year? ...

*sigh* still hovering around 26,000 and I don't anticipate finishing. If I can even break 30,000, I think I would be happy, though ^_^

This just seems like novelty, and what wasn't novelty sounded like ranting. The 'sentence' (I don't know what I can call it for a poem XD)structure was interesting at times, ...

I can agree entirely that it is plot less. I'm still wondering why I thought I could get away without a plot, actually XD But the fortunes weren't random, actually, ...

The past tense thing is only when discussing literature. Like, when writing about Macbeth, you shouldn't say "Lady Macbeth used supernatural elements during her monologue" you should say "Lady Macbeth

Brace your ears for a minute... *just be yourself* Okay. Sorry for the cliche XD but seriously, that's what we've been hearing from guidance. As in, if you don't normally ...