Leja

Even if the left/right thing is an inside joke, I still found it rather funny. Even if I technically don't get it. XD

Normally, I could care less about punctuation, but I think a bit is necessary here because as is, it's rather slow going, and all your ideas hit against one another. ...

I've been looking at this title in the list of recent posts for a while now. I like it. And I like the line breaks. I think that would translate ...

hehe, I've had those days ^_^ 9/10

Odd chocolate bit, and you're a monkey supporter :P :wink: 7/10

6/10 The arms are oddly proportioned

Cool! I can't wait to listen :D

lol, this is much too long to be considered a drabble, but whatever ^_^ First, a note on format: It's much easier to read things online when there's a space ...

I like the first sentence. It's a nice way to begin right in the middle of things. The second sentence just seemd to follow the first sentence, but because it ...

I liked the style of the beginning (the first two paragraphs). But I'm glad it left the he said/she said realm shortly thereafter because I don't think I could deal ...

“HIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA” Oh my goodness. The login dialogue between Reyu and the computer was funny. Kinda like watching a pingpong match where your head bounces back and forth XD R

I like this. Very factual-sounding without having that non-fiction drone. Why is his ~former girlfriend crying against his shirt if they're breaking up? She seems rather too mad at him ...

The description in the beginning is unnecessary and reads as an info dump. I don't need to know exactly how her hair is done, or every piece of clothing she ...

Ah, a hospital story... This first paragraph is filled with heavily described action. Instead, it might be more useful to describe the surroundings more than the action. Because when you ...

I think I get it. At least for now XD Thanks all.