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I think there needs to be a little more detail. Especially towards the middle, the sentences become rather short, and in the same form of subject/verb/object. Variation of structure, description, ...

*PLZ CRITIC, TNX* Things like this are unnecessary; it should be assumed that someone will critique it, as that is the point of this website. Also, the chatspeak and the ...

Wildecharlie818, First off, just a friendly reminder of the 2-1 rule on YWS. That is, for every piece of work you post, you should critique at least two by other ...

I can help ^_^ Let's say you had 2/4=x/8. When you cross multiply in this example, you'd multiply the two and the eight and set it equal to the 4 ...

Yay everyone!

I poked around a bit, but I'm happy YWS :) Good luck, though.

If I remember correctly, it's pro-faith and anti-religious institution. To greatly simplify things, that is.

Because companies don't like just giving things away. For some odd reason. And they get more attention this way XD

It's fun! But like others have said, severely dangerous to your time XD

mm, let's try this again ^^ So I decided the title would be better fitting for something else (what, I don't know yet, but I'm sure there'll be something else ...

There is nothing subtle about this poem. As such, it seems especially emo. "We were both in pain,/yours was emotional mine was physical" This line seems too prosaic, too blatant. ...

I liked the first book! So I can't wait to see the movie. However, I haven't read these for five or six years, so maybe I have unrealistic expectations ^_^

This reads as if it should be a nonfiction piece (because the narration is so distant) Tear-crafting is a specialised talent taking lifetimes to perfect. yet it is emotionally infused ...

We're a silly bunch. :D lol ^_^

[s]I didn't like the blue jay image in the second stanza. It seemed too fleeting and didn't really return.[/s] (disregard ^_^) The second stanza sounds too lofty to me. Lots ...