Leja

I love all the liquid images here, especially given the evaporation at the very end. The only thing I wonder about is how the smiles evaporate when the sun is ...

lol, I love those half-asleep moments of noting in the dark. Always interesting to read come morning! ^_^ This seems like a very whole poem, like it's something I can ...

The "you" seems heavily accented, almost spat out. This is a good thing, since there's obviously anger directed at this "you", but it's used so often that it starts to ...

Ooh, thanks for pointing that out, Jasmine. I totally didn't notice! *will edit* ^_^

Thanks all ^_^ First off, I did honestly write 2 April's poem on 2 April, but I got to it so late that it was past the time that one ...

This has such a nice, clear tone to it. I like it a lot ^_^ especially the ending.

I think that I think the ideas here are cool, but they seem a little fuzzy. The fourth line was the one that confused me; I feel like I'm missing ...

Can a kiss quiet my sunken self-esteem? Only in my dreams. This metaphor seems a little vague; the word quiet makes me thing of something auditory, and self-esteem sinking is ...

Clots of fluorescent lights sway with the waves, I love the word "clots" here. All the words, actually, are strong individually and in conjunction with each other, which only adds ...

Look especially at the first stanza. It seems like a string of lines, loosly connected, rather than a unified image. The "you" in the second stanza is a little jarring, ...

What I've decided to do is draw inspiration from paintings, I will post the piece of art after the poetry. Now, to onto the mess. ooh, cool! I like the ...

The only critique I have is that these seem like a lot of one-line phrases. I like the contrast between plant seeds and the last line of "the ones that ...

those three men reading those three books on those three park benches. Surprisingly, I like the repetition here. I also like the semi-repetition near the end because it picks up ...

the people peering into my PVC pipe into heaven will wrap their arms around me, say "Welcome. That wasn't so bad, was it?" The two uses of "into" here make ...

haha, I haven't been in much of a butchering mood as of late, but I'll see what I can conjure up ^_^ There's a lot of the word "in". Is ...