Leja

You're right; this is just the right length, and packed with words (never mind the fact that I understood the allusion ^_^)! That is, I didn't feel like it was ...

I thought this was a cool idea ^_^ All the quotation marks made for distraction, though. Happy writing!

Your face. Your mom's face? *gasp* :wink: As to massive numbers of posts: I heard a rumor about flying monkeys... I think Sumi might know more? :P

Oops! This poem was posted twice. Please continue critiquing in this thread: *locked*

Hello, jessiieeboo, You've got a story here, rather than a poem, so I'm going to move this to Other Fiction. Happy writing! -Leja

*rating changed to PG for instance of swearing* Have a good day! -Leja

That's a really cool idea for a contest :D I like how in the beginning, "And I went to the park" gets its own line. Nicely effective ^_^ I headed ...

Alas, day six is a dud >< If ever I had considered giving equal consideration to Moby Dick and Beethoven, I was severely mistaken because First of all, they're the ...

Ooh; it's interesting that the mustard gas drips from his shoulders and not something more common like his head or his hands! The rest of it achieved the effect wonderfully, ...

I adore these, Cal, especially the second as it's an importantly fresh take on an age-old adage.

This is sooo random :D But I love it for the last line "Yoda evolved from Umpa Lumpas" and that raining pixie dust sounds cool.

Why am I so fascinated with using rock motifs, as of lately? I have no idea. Because rocks are cool? ^_^ Anyway, I like the analogy, but it's a tad ...

I see how this could be intended as more of a prose-poem (and it's almost there!), but the way it's structured makes it really more of a flash fiction piece. ...

Gates? I'm so confused! Is this a traffic light? I had been visualizing the car passing over the ground, rather than passing through airspace in which the narrator would look ...

I like the pointed summary in the beginning stanza. After that though, the one-line/one-sentence stanzas got a bit on my nerves. The last stanza (excluding the last line) was a ...