Leja

Wish granted: you've just finished it; however, it was unfortunately due last Friday. :? I wish I knew more about physics

I liked the description, especially the bit about sand. I don't know if this was purposeful or not, but the word "I" is inconsistantly capitalized, so just pointing that out. ...

I like the idea for the syllabal count, but I'm not quite sure it has the desired effect because I could only really appreciate it after I read the note ...

This poem made my day. Nothing more to say.

The rain falls and darkness comes Absorbed in the ground The air is heavy with want of the fresh summer evening To chase away the heavy sorrows winter brings ...... ...

This might be a strange way to begin a review, but this poem just seemed so self-contained. What I mean by this is that no additional content is needed to ...

I think this is a nice little poem. I liked the first half especially: they made me feel like I was in a room where the walls were closing in. ...

Congratulations! :D

just lovely

I happened to like the informal language; when a person gets tired (whether it be of a situation or in general) they often tend to speak or act in a ...

I really enjoyed reading this piece; I think you should continue it.

I liked Griffinkeeper's idea; I'd never thought of that. :)

I liked it! At first, I didn't see that there were sentences within it; this could be fixed by paragraph spacing, if you'd like. Maybe see if you can connect ...

my friend showed me this one: ..... oooO................... ....(......)...Oooo........ .....).../. ...(.....)......... .....(_/.......).../......... ............... (_/.......... ....................

"Of course not" ~Bao (telling the truth) and Connie (a lying liar who's lying through her teeth) What's your favorite time of day?