Leja

Personally, I have alot of fun people-watching. Usually, I write down a long string of thoughts relating to the person I'm observing (it's especially amusing if the person you're watching ...

A barefoot elf with rather long hair and pointy ears. Nora Blythe

Connie to Gwen: Oh, sorry, just calling to see if you're going to the rally, but... eh... apparently not. Oh, are you going to the... never mind, probably not. The... ...

Bounty hunting? Well, that's certainly an interesting... habit dear; I'm always here if you need to talk. -Mrs. Mills

Joyous allergies People can think you are sick Even when you cry.

Music began and the congregation looked expectantly towards the words projected onto the wall. The first verse began, punctuated chords coming from the instrumental section. Then the people began to ...

Snoink, I read your synnopsis and really wanted to then read your story...but then I realized that it's no where to be found :( So I hope it comes out ...

This was absolutely wonderful to read. In your first paragraphs, I liked how you mixed very long and very short sentences, it was helpful, drawing the reader back to reality. ...

--- Major re-write coming soon! --- They said it had begun years ago, before I could remember, before I was even born. But don’t try to pass that off me. ...

Generally, a new paragraph should come when the speaker changes, whether in dialogue or point of view. Break up paragraphs between scenes and ideas within a scene as well. You ...

Lottie, I'm not sure if you meant for each of these to stand alone, or for each to be expanded (I'm assuming it's the second one). I'm also unsure if ...

Oh dear. Fig Newtons. Seemed to be the perfect choice for a dare at the time. Sitting here, however, Morgan was beginning to wish she'd chosen the path of truth. ...

I once shrugged from his touch, flinching as his moist breath hit my skin. Few words lingered in my throat as my bones turned to cinder and his fingertips became ...

Knowing that I was going to die made my mind rush faster than ever before. I could hear the evil voice in the back of my mind saying "You're going ...

Try to spread out your synnonyms for "said"; a character spits, asserts, rebukes, insists, etc. every paragraph, and it weakens the impact those words can have. The sentence "He had ...