Leja

the first time you make it a crime to state an opinion, you start on a veerrrryyyy dangerous road. Yep. I'm sure this wasn't their intent, but it makes you ...

Yes, I see how lowering the age limit could/would easily backfire. Mostly because changing the laws will not change peoples' mindsets. It might do something three generations away, but I ...

"You might say that I knew it as well as my own house, my bedroom. " This sentence was awkward; it might be better if you cut out "my own ...

Firestalker, length is not always a large issue, with the exception of things like writing contests. If you find yourself editing in more to the story, that's great. Sometimes extra ...

Where I live, restaurants and such public places have been smoke-free for a while, and it's wonderful not having to worry if you'll accidentlly be seated in the smoking section ...

The way it's presented in the article, it sounds like nothing more than a tourist attraction.

I was a little surprised as well that Bush wasn't on the list since he's quote/unquote the leader of the free world (political preferences aside). I also found it interesting ...

I'm wondering if extreme changes in emotion would bring the reader into the story more; for instance if the scene immediately before the death was a happy-life-is-good-time-of-your-life kind of moment

That always makes me sad. I'm equally sad when I realize part way through my story that there are characters who don't really serve a purpose, or two characters who ...

6/10 congratulations?

Oh, good books => Bartleby the Scrivener by Herman Melville and The Yellow-Wallpaper by Charlotte Perkins Gibbon. And The Crucible by Arthur Miller if it's decided that plays will be ...

Wow, I've read 20 of these...though some only through school. I wouldn't have finished the Scarlet Letter if my midterm grade hadn't hinged on it. That being said, I also ...

I like the rewrite better than the original. I think that it flows better and that the spacing and line breaks are better. The middle is a little long for ...

5/10: It's confusing, but samurais are cool :D

I critique when I have time to lend thought to the story/poem though, unfortunately, most overall meaning is often lost on me. Like everyone else, I often think to myself, ...