Leja

I think that the thy/thine (s) really made the poem. I as well think that "Greater Gods" should be lowercase since God in singular form and with a uppercase "g" ...

Thanks for your comments, everyone! I took out one or two "perfect"s but I'm going to leave the rest in because this kind of perfection should bother you :P

Ooh, hadn't thought about that; I'd totally miss right clicking things!

Thanks all for critiquing this, but it is in dire need of being forgotten. [s]--- Version 2 --- When I was young they were everywhere-- Them and their perfect hair, ...

Thanks for your input everyone. Jack, what kinds of problems were you alluding to?

*smile* It definately made me think of spring/summer, and it made me happy, even though it is simplistic (I didn't like how the first word of every line was "the" ...

--- Version 2 --- He looks one way, she another and then their gazes meet while the world slows down for them though people still rush past in ignorance. Their ...

Hmm, I'm not sure if this goes here, but I can't think of anywhere else to post it. Anyways. I'm debating between a Mac or PC. As I have never ...

"shhh" was the perfect way to begin; otherwise I would have heard it as shouting, but here I hear it as whispering, especially when followed by all the other "s" ...

Fred makes me laugh. So much: [Fred] 10:25 pm: " Did you know that you can download your own chat robot and create your own robot personality"? Can you? For ...

Hmm, I wasn't sure if this was supposed to rhyme or not. If it was, the rhymes were a bit stretched. The rhythem is off on some of the lines; ...

At first, the general sentence pattern seemed to be "Mary" or "she" followed by a verb. This becomes redundant and tired after a while, so try changing it up every ...

Sigh, Sumi, you shouldn't be bored :D umm, I'm not sure what to say. My general reaction was that it should be a song in a movie (preferably sung by ...

Piano teacher: And why didn't you practice, Amelia? Amelia: I couldn't find the page. Piano teacher opens to bookmarked page in music book Amelia [blushing]: oh, there it is. --- ...

haha, LOVING the symphony allusion :wink: My only problem with it was there was a big, blatant block of exposition afterwards, beginning with "Ah, yes, have I mentioned it yet?". ...