Leja

Yes, it is typical and cliche; I disagree with nothing that you have said here (you're right about the blonde/brunette thing).

--- Updated as of 18 June 2007 at 5:02 pm --- “Tag, you’re it.” And the game begins. I whisper it to myself, though no one is around to hear. ...

It works; it works! *doesn't want to jinx it* Thank you!

Take care with punctuation; you do not need a period after every line. Punctuation si most useful for clarity and emphasis, and putting in punctuation just for the sake of ...

I really wanted to press the "enter" key in the middle of the first stanza.... I like the idea of a change in thought being related to a change in ...

Makes sense to me, too. Short. I like. My only critique is that you began in kind of a flowing, elegant style, then ended in choppy, mixed up words.

no picture; link-y no work :(

Amelia walks up to the door and opens it just a crack so she can see in. She slides through the door unnoticed and takes a seat at the counter, ...

First of all, take a deep breath and consider what people who posted before me said. Most all of them make good, reasonable points. To make another point, you say ...

Oh, you're that girl... not this one, not that one, but that girl ^_^ 9/10

no, I'm not a fan of sarcasm or anything... 9/10 :wink:

Breaking this up into stanzas would make it more easily readable... But Fand had a good thought to convert this to prose. I think this woudl make a lovely story. ...

Can't go wrong with categorizing a poem as "other" :wink: Consider breaking this up a bit more into separate stanzas. This makes it easier for the reader to read, often ...

It's a pretty image, and if you've tried only to record a beautiful day at the beach, you've done a good job. I think that it could be even better ...

The "it" in the third line is vague, and I'm not sure which noun it is referring to, whether it be life or the bird. The second stanza doesn't seem ...