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You know, I got halfway through the first stanza before I said to myself "Woah, wait a minute, what did that first line say?!" I felt like the rhyming was ...

In this stanza: More surprised that it was I who took one yardstick-flurry from my mother... it was a little confusing because it seems like something should come before, as ...

6/10 I can't read it :(

Yo hablo español.

Dialogue tags are always helpful. Even the basic he said/she said after someone speaks for clarification. Though be careful you don't go overboard ^_^

Just two lines... yet they do work. When I saw it on the main page, I was initially looking for more of it ^_^

*can't stop laughing at Sponson Light's post*

7/10 left is right... if you wait long enough If an ant fell out of a tree, would it get hurt? Or is it so small that gravity wouldn't pull ...

Amelia laughs at a conversations that does not involve her. Yet, although she has been evesdropping ^_^, she would still like to point out a theory on sugar, that most ...

*gasp* acoustic? no, no, no ^_^

:) Sweet. Indeed :D Sounds interesting. Just make sure you identify the conflict, as that seems to be what got you into trouble in the first place ^_^

My initial reaction was that halfway through the first stanza, I couldn't remember what the subject was. Is there any way you can break this up into a few more ...

My favorite books are still the "Talking With Dragons" (by Patricia C. Wrede) books that I found in my school library in fifth grade. I don't think I can truly ...

[quote="sanguine_dreams]when you make your characters as stubborn as mine, they tend to take things into their own hands.[/quote] And there you have the possibility of a story. Have you outlined? ...

I've never had a truly evil character because a) I've always liked my characters too much, even the bad ones b) I still haven't come up with a truly good ...