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I'd also like to point out, Sam, that you seem to have taken two extremes of femininity (I don't know if that's a word, or if I just like repeating ...

First off, I'd suggest going through and editing out for wordiness. Sometimes that alone can clear up many problems. For example, in the first paragraph or so: It came, sometimes, ...

P.S.: I see the title of this thread, and start singing "Hey There Delilah" in my head ^_^

I know... we went to this Walgreens and then this grill restaurant after the show in all our make-up/tie-dye stuff from the last number, and the people were looking at ...

Thanks all! *scurries away to look up said titles*

Hey Chelsea. I'm Amelia; nice to meet you. I can't wait to read your writing; have you got anything ready to post? and rather bad C-grade melodramatic poetry. looking forward ...

PLEASE do not comment on lyric poetry if you hate the way it sounds anyway Maybe I'm just out of the loop, but I didn't know lyric poetry was required ...

What’ so special about Spanish Butterflies? What makes them different from the English ones, or the Peruvian ones, or any other butterflies you might see? This one, for example. She’s ...

Sounds like a YA books with a stick-skinny girl on the cover. Maybe just because it rhymes. Possibly set in the desert. A Million Things She'll Never Need

Hello again, Mel; I believe we've met in the chat I love love looooooooove to write. It's my first love. *whispers* Don't tell my husband that. haha :D your secret's ...

Things I've mentioned in other chapters still apply, like info blocks and such. Yeah, it's a bit of an odd chapter, but no worries. That's what makes it fun to ...

I found Sitar wandering around moonily . No doubt he’d gone into the city that surrounds my offices, and found some girl at his favorite haunt. Moonily doesn't give off ...

EDIT: Hmm, so I've already reviewed, but I forgot that I had until the third paragraph or so (Gimmie a break; my memory does not span two whole months very ...

Things like "Mwahahahahahaha" aren't generally used in a story that isn't intended for satire because they're often too... immature. There are other ways of describing a cackling laugh that will ...

This doesn't seems so much a story as a plot outline in prose format. Take ideas like "This guardian angel will try to save the moon child" and flesh them ...