Leja

So why are we posting when it's not nearly the three-day deadline? *looks at post* aw crud; I guess we have our answer.

*sigh* to live in a fairy tale world 10/10

I have to block out thoughts of you. Because all it brings is depression. Depression is such a generalized term. What does that really mean anymore? Give me something heart-wrenching. ...

I think you should just get rid of the line breaks, as it already reads like a story. Honestly, in this format, I couldn't make it past the second stanza.

There was little to no rhythem, so I didn't find this very poetic. I found most of it to be rather ramble-y. Here, you get to the heart of what ...

Hey, ho, let's go and God save the queen. I don't think "and" is necessary; it just emphasizes the fact that you're crashing lyrics together . Aww, I like the ...

It almost sounds like you're just writing because someone told you to. I...don't have anything new to say. For once. I echo STRONGLY the people who've posted previously; listen to ...

This poem=gorgeous. ...I was tempted to just leave it at that... A few things at the end caught my eye: I kiss you. That ever-lasting kiss of frozen end. Freeze ...

I thought it was pretty funny, actually. Or maybe my sense of humour's just off since I'll laugh at almost anything. Seemed like one looong tangent, but that's part of ...

Story go bye bye?

Claudette's appearances made me laugh. Style note: I think it would be easier to read if it were less like a chat log and more like a script [since this ...

I don't agree with the turtle shell image because I get stuck at thinking there are holes for the turtles' arms and legs, and this seems [to me] to defeat ...

It seems very robotic and mechanical, like "this happens, then this happens, then this happens". In this model, you force the person reading to come up with the emotional half ...

My Sister's Keeper got me, and The Time Traveller's Wife too, if I remember correctly.

Was anyone disappointed with the epilogue? I expected it to be more detailed about the lives of the survivors than that. I still have questions! Yeah, I don't think it ...