Leja

Hello new member calmmermaid ^_^ First of all, I'd like to welcome you to YWS and encourage you to review a few things before you post. Try to keep it ...

I sort of wish you'd connected the Earth image a little more throughout the poem. The first three lines are perfect for this image, but then the Earth is sort ...

This seems very apathetic. By the end, there should be some kind of emotional conclusion about why it's important that the second person won't look back at the first person ...

At first glance, this appears to be a collection of sentence fragment, especially since there are often words missing in them. If you'd like me to go through this more ...

Ooh, what kind of research are you doing? There's a whole forum called Research (under the Community forums) if you're stuck on a particular question ^_^ And the question of ...

Haha, summer will do that to you ^_^ I'm in a similar state of guilt myself. You should check out the Writing Activities (in the Community forums) section if you're ...

Yay middle of nowhere! Bah; you're not too old, don't worry! What's your nonfiction project about? It sounds pretty cool, and there isn't a *lot* of nonfiction around so I'm ...

Ciao, Lizzie! Acting sounds like fun ^_^ Do you like to write plays, then? What's your favorite play to perform? See you around! -Leja

Spitting faces... lol ^_^ It almost looks like they're trying the drink the water back up from the pool. I love how these are all done in black and white ...

You don't have to know every single detail of the ending before you begin, just big things that lead to the resolution of the conflict. If your character changes shoes ...

Three-fence! Just because it looks like it belongs in a nursery rhyme ^_^ But other than that, I use defence for sports and defense for military type things. Though I ...

I really like the idea of this poem, the whole "How do you write a whole poem? BAM! There it is!" ^_^ To that extent, this poem works very well. ...

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Aloha, Kalliope! Yay NaPo poems! Right now, it seems a little disjointed, given the linebreaks. here's a suggestion for rearranging: Last night I slammed the door behind me. Now it ...