Leja

Hiya Ava! I like your avatar ^_^

I think that the biggest problem with this is that there is no attempt to present anything other than what's on the surface. There's no concentration on word choice; there's ...

The dialogue bits were a little confusing; maybe you could italicize those to be clearer? Lightning's weaving 'cross the sky, and I am silent, for I have no answer; where ...

Sorry, I use quote/dialogue as synnonyms, which I probably shouldn't. :shrug: Honestly, I couldn't get through very much of it. Because of the lack of spacing, my eyes wandered on ...

Could he take medicines, then? Yes, but it was part of his sickness that he didn’t want to. The second sentence didn't make much sense. When my grades began to ...

“Excusa,” she said, tapping an imaginary watch and smiling wryly. Lynnie smiled weakly in response. The words to accept her apology were evading her. I'm rather confused here. Is she ...

I like writing at my desk late at night, but I end up looking out the window alot. Writing on single leafs of paper is easier than writing in a ...

First off, you should try to put a space in between paragraphs; it makes it much easier to read. Yes, it might require some extra work, but it's defineately worth ...

Yay! New blood is always welcome, especially in the script forum where there isn't as much activity as in, say, the poetry forum. So welcome! And I'll see you around ...

yay! I vote to nix the title's translation. If people want to know, they can go look it up! (and they should know that if it's Claud, it's French :wink:) ...

The soft music resonated throughout the room, and I couldn’t help but react. “Lips of an Angel” always did that to me, I couldn’t help but sway by myself. As ...

Hmm, a little angry about something? I really wish you'd capitalized God in the single line following the first stanza. Or make it plural. After a while, capital letters just ...

What I didn't like was that you defined livre, calling attention to the fact that it's an acrostic poem. I like how covers/colors sound together. Were I you, I'd switch ...

yay this is going to be cool!

:grr: definately. tpbm prefers writing in pen, marker, crayon, anything that isn't pencil.