Leja

Amelia is cool. ^_^ I happen to think so too. :wink: But otherwise, I think Anna's a lovely name, and Tiffany [with a Y at the end, idk if that's ...

I think about doing that every once in a while... and then don't, for whatever reason. But thanks for reminding me again! :D If it's my book, I tend to ...

Somebody called you pretentious today. It was not that which bugged you, because you have been called that many times before. It was the way it was said, the classic ...

Surprisingly, I liked the first few lines, how they grew longer and longer. That's a nice effect, albeit a tad superficial. Past that, it is rather blunt, and seems to ...

I don't think the rhyming works so well ["I know you read my work but why?/ Has any of it ever made you cry" and the following stanza, especially]. Everything ...

I like the imagery you have here, but it seems almost haphazard at times. For example, in the first stanza, the old tokens collect on the floor, but immediately following, ...

Sure, the words all sound fine together, but what does the poem do beyond that? Unless you are the author, or the girl it is written for, it doesn't do ...

I like drawing maps! Then, at least, you know where everything is in relation to everything else. In general, it's good if the rule holds true that every action has ...

So how do you decide to break your lines in poetry? Is it whenever you "think" you should, whenever it "sounds right"? Or is there some... not rule, quite, but ...

First of all, it's about dancing, so I'm instantly intrigued! And mephisto as well[er, I'm assuming you meant the camera manufacturer at the moment, but there's not much to clue ...

Woot! That's awesome, Nate!

Goldie: when you think of your twenty-three ideas, which one comes to mind first? Whatever the answer, that might be a good one to expand upon.

I think when people do horrible things to others, consciously knowing what they're doing, and consciously wanting to hurt them even more, you're getting closer to what hate is. Though ...

Definitely leave "wind and rain" out of the line you mentioned; it clutters things a bit. Or I suppose you could just leave out the "the" and have: "Fell wind ...

I don't write to impress, Just to merely express; I think these lines could benefit from parallel structure and flow better as a result. This means that since the first ...