Leja

This is a solid poem, but the first thing I'd have to say about it is that it's just too blunt. Not blunt in the sarcastic way that it's often ...

After reading this poem, the only thing I can ask is "So what?" So far, it only tells the *what* of hypocrites, rather than the *why* which is so much ...

This poem read like it was trying to impersonate lyrics but didn't quite want to (the second stanza especially). In all, I'm kind of confused. I like the first stanza ...

This poem reminded me very much of Phantom of the Opera, which is both a good and a bad thing. It's a good thing because everything makes more sense to ...

You know, in my opinion, the stand-alone-line saves the poem. Up until that point, everything seems very static; statements of images that are put out there and then just fall. ...

This poem doesn't sit too well with me simply because it goes in so many directions. At the beginning, it talks about a house, and I assumed that this house ...

Parts two and three were cool for the way they sounded, esp: "my mistake: dark, quixotic night, skies that fall on tall, metal buildings like rain", but there were other ...

This is not a very clear poem from the beginning. It's as if it's too sparse to get its meaning across. Throughout the entire poem, I'm not sure what's being ...

Wrapping my head around this new constant of reality is like trying to divide by zero O_o :P

Yes, it is a rather silly poem, but that doesn't mean silliness can't be taken seriously! ^_^ Catch a few more images with Cupid's arrow and this could be a ...

The first stanza had the best rhythm, and was perfect to be said out loud. But by just the third stanza, this concentration seems to disappear. The lines seem more ...

Ciao, unsterblichkeit! I think that this poem would be even better if it were longer. Don't worry so much about explaining the poem at the beginning, but rather write it ...

Filled with enchantment and adventure and indescribable wonder. But it's your job as a poet to describe the indescribable wonder! ^_^ This is a very good start, and there's a ...

Down they fall Doomed they all In the whole poem, I liked these lines the best for their sound. They're very heavy words that seem to bring even more weight ...

Welcome! I can't really say much (well, anything, actually) in Vietnamese, so I'll just say hi! It's awesome that your friend introduced you to the site. If you have any ...