LeeshaLeesh

Thanks so much! I wish I had this critique before I had turned it in. My biggest mistake was letting my friends tell me what they thought of it and ...

I really enjoyed reading this! The emotions were so real and I could really visualize your writing! First chapters are the hardest. Keep writing! :D

I don't like the way the whole thing is condensed into such a short piece of writing, yet covers so much of your character's lives...this could be expanded so much ...

That was one of the funniest stories I have ever read. I love how real a breakup can be. Your use of dialog is superb. :] keep up the good ...