Leahweird

I have a problem with the title. I wouldn't say Hatshepsut is particularly forgotten. Any one who knows much about Pharaohs knows who she is, even people that don't delve ...

Oooh! New perspective! And a really nice job of separating the two as well, which s really hard to do. I really like the way Rayvore is set up as ...

Hey Alvarin! I am blatantly using you to up my score for review day, but I say the latest chapter of this is the greenroom, and I have truly been ...

I like this as it is. Being completely laid out is not always the best thing. What matters to me is the language and what the poem evokes. However, it ...

Hello there! I haven't read the whole thing, I ran out of time (sorry!) But I really like what I've seen! I love how clear it is how Alex feels ...

Hi Aria! I haven't read the rest of the story yet, but I think there's a few things I can try and help with. For one thing are you missing ...

I really love this concept, and I Love the idea of this nine year old being showed and disappointed by this crazy thing that happened. I think that's actually where ...

Hi! I'm going to be really nitpicky here, because I think in most places you've crafted some really excellent phrases. There are just a few spots that stick out. "as ...

Oh Gods I love these. Did you use Chatzy to make this? Or just borrow the format? Either way I love it. I was giggling. This seemed like a follow ...

Hello! I was reading some of your storybook posts (Because I'm creepy like that) and I admired your flair for colour and detail so I thought I'd check some of ...

This is great! You've managed to set everything up without making the exposition seems forced. That's tricky to do. The only actual criticism I have is the overuse of the ...

I approve of the name choice ;) Anyways, I didn't see any errors. I loved the scene by the pool. I think it has shade of the frog prince, which ...

“Don’t worry I’m not going to get catch.” You have a catch instead of a caught "She’s probably just wait of a free guy, such as my self, to come ...

“Oi lady you alright mate” Are you missing an extra D here? "In England but I must have been" This doesn't make sense. Are you missing words? This seamt way ...

You haven't posted anything in a while, and i have missed your writing. This chapter shows off why. The moments you've created are so real. And the contrast between the ...