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Re: The Art of Burning Fairies
Wow, that was, wow. Amazing story I must say. Though I would be lying if I said I wasn't just a bit confused at the end. Such as, how did ...
Apr 25, 2010 -
Re: Why did we get on the wrong plane Part 2
Well, I saw a few grammatical errors, such as when you put 'there', you should have put 'their'. There were also a few sentences at the beginning that didn't really ...
Mar 5, 2010 -
Re: Can you see me??? part 1
That had a lot of emotion. I liked it. :smt001 It could have better fluency, but it's not bad. If you want some ideas for the title, how about Invisible ...
Feb 17, 2010 -
Re: My Third-Eye (Part One)
Well, there was one or 2 missing apostrophies and I saw some un-needed capitilization once or twice. And you put 'apart' where I think you meant to put 'a part'. ...
Feb 17, 2010 -
Re: Haiku of Nature
These were really nice! The last one flowed together nicely. The second one could have some more fluency to it. The first one was also a good poem, the last ...
Feb 17, 2010