Lauren

'Twas not light or bubbly one bit. The mood captured is perfect. It has a kind of Jodi Picoult-like quality, in its evident realism. There is only thing thing I ...

Ok, I'm not a photo-buff like Rosey above ;) but I'll just comment on what I think, as a complete novice. Photos 1&2: Hmm, sorry, I don't like them. *Grins ...

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Ha, funny that, I've just been reading this article. I love Will Self. :smt053

For me, absolutely not. Who wants perfect characters? Not I. OK, maybe the exception of teen fic, if smoking is being used in a way that might encourage teenagers... but ...

You can tell a lot about a person from their face. I hope not... or else I am dooomed . :lol:

Yay! I'm sure I've never had so many critiques in my life. xD Demeter - Oh, thanks for the critique! I always find those review for food things a bit ...

Hi there, 200397 ! :smt039 Well, what can I say? This is fantastic, that's what. Really. Truly. I'm not the sort of person who exaggerates. The imagery was pungent, heady... ...

June - Thanks so much for the critique :) I agree with most of your nit-picks and will see to another edit to this story, save a few matters I ...

Same Shauni. I hate summer anyway.

I was trying to impress someone last year, and I suppose I'd drunk too much Pepsi... My god it makes me cringe to think of it. I started breathing peppercorns ...

Two lovely more critiques :D Thank you both so much. I'll return the favour ASAP. Kirsten - Why are you so kind ? :D You're always such a considerate, complimentary ...

Why the separate paragraph for every line??? It's a real challenge for my poor eyeballs... Right, now I've got that little grumble out of the way, onwards with the story! ...

Nice. So it lacked desciption, imagery, soul, depth, all that... But I suppose that was the point, hmm? It made me smile :) I can't really criticise much, which rather ...

Hi and welcome, Saphire_earthguardian! Good for you, trying a new type of fiction. I myself can't stand fantasy fiction, so I'm glad this isn't it. Nit-picks I feel perfectly fine ...