Lauren

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Hi. Can I just say, first of all, that this was absolutely beautiful, this story? It had all the right elements to it. and café’s Yeah... there shouldn't be an ...

I don't understand... you're confused? Two say it's confusing, the others don't. Surely, for what it is, you can critique? Pretty pointless comment, Thea! Oh well. P.S. Stop putting yourself ...

Hi there! Will just skip straight to comments and corrections... The wind blew wildly, hitting the sides of the small hut where Brittany sat. Any other time she would have ...

Hi - I liked this; it was fun. Here are some things I saw that need correcting: Colin Everywhere else you've spelled it 'Collin'. of his desk OFF his desk. ...

Hi, Monki, nice to meet you! Now, to what I think: The opening paragraphs were really well-written. Very... analytical. And I'm sure many people can relate to it. It was ...

Yeah, conventinoally a mystery book, but it's all about the human nature and the affects of choices made earlier on. It's... brilliant!

Just... lovely, lovely, lovely! The prose of so very poetic that I'm sure you should try your hand at transforming this into actual poetry. Your wording lingers, is not easily ...

Ah, thank you, Sapphire, you are too kind :D Yes the 'content with other people's feelings' is something I am sure relates to many people. In that aspect, I suppose ...

Thanks, salsashanno - your review was most encouraging. It wasn't awful in the least - compliments work just as well :D

Hi - corrections and comments are in bold. Snowflakes float down from the dark void that is the sky. They paint my cheeks and nose a cool wet sheer and ...

Hi. Nice to meet you. “Becca?” Mom calls. She appears in the doorway. Her honey - colored curls are brimming with gray and the crease lines on her face have ...

I haven't got so much to say because it's been pretty much covered. However, I am just dropping by to say: WOW! Your writing style/technique is exceptional... truly. Flawless, in ...

Hi, little miss military brat :) Just returning the favour. I liked this a lot. It was written in a fun, light-hearted way, emphasizing that Leila and Jonathan are young ...

Hi. I like the opening. It gave us a good idea of the MC's character. However, I have some problems with it. The main thing is that it's more action ...