Lauren

Okay, thanks both of you. GML: Thank you for your critique. I'm glad I portrayed the emotion without getting too clouded to write with clarity. I will probably lose that ...

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Hi. Before I start, you should know that you have to critique at least twice before each story you submit. That's why you've not got many reviews. The dialogue, I ...

I think this has potential - a lot of potential. And that is because your MC, Lexi, sounds very real - I like how she described her feelings on friends, ...

Hello! I also thought this was pretty decent. The descriptions were illustrious... everything was analysed to its full potential... you have a way with words and a varied vocabulary. The ...

I don't know... I feel I can talk more easily with male teachers, for some reason, but then I am less on-edge when a woman is teaching. An exception is ...

I used wonder about it... geek that I am. I do believe I write 'till' more than the other, because I think it looks better. But, then again, 'til is ...

You know when you're just insanely bored...? And somewhat eccentic, I should add.

Hi again, Bittersweet. I think you've outdone yourself here. Normally, if it was an average storyline, I would complain that it was a bit 'this happened, that happened' but I ...

Hey, thanks for lending some time to critique, chocoholic! I'm not really sure if this should be in Other Fiction I know. My Bad. Thing is, I didn't want it ...

I thought this was a great read, casstic. I can see how the MC is unstable in her feelings for his man, how she can't make sense of them, and ...

Okay, so I have to agree with some of the others, that is was a bit... well, it wasn't exactly riveting. It was sweet but not particularly imaginative and, as ...

Yeah, I've read this. Confusion might be due to the fact that it's called 'A Northern Light' in America, and I think 'A Gathering Light' is a variarion used in ...

Thanks for the critique, Sam. I understand I got a tad too carried away with the dialogue and left the setting and characters a bit on the threadbare side. It's ...

Thanks for the review, scasha. Thing is, with the whole 'what her master'd given her' and the like, it's meant to not sound proper-English. I thought that if I'd narrated ...