Lauren

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Hi. First thing that struck me was that it's really short for a chapter. Can it be longer next time? Another thing is that you chose to right the present ...

I think it all comes down to potential. We have potential to be evil, we have potential to be good. How we are nurtured, and the experiences we have, determine ...

As much as we complain, 'retard' is a proper, clinical term. It is used by doctors still. I don't see what's wrong with that, so long as it is being ...

The term 'retard' is nearly always used in a derogatory form, as a way of insulting people. Even when it is said light-heartedly, say from one friend to another, I ...

If you could ignore the half-finished man. :)

A pencil study of a 16th Century noblewoman.

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Hi. It's a bit BIG. Couldn't you rescale it? Um, not really sure if I would call this art - hehe - but it does look pretty cool. I spotted ...

This is supergood for MS Paint. It's got a lot of character to it - love the eyes and mouth. I think my friend Ruby used to watch that show. ...

Bitterly real. I liked it. My only issues are with the pacing. You said you wrote it in more or less twenty minutes and, forgive me, it shows. I would ...

Hi! I thought this was great! It had all the right amosphere and dialogue for a gripping historical tale. I, like listeningforthemuse, found myself wondering what had happened to bring ...

Hi there! Now, before I get onto the main things, I'm wondering what age group you're aiming this at. Because that allows different things. For example, this is clearly a ...

I think it lost some of its spark, to be honest. Vianne was trying to be normal, and this time there were three characters narrating: Vianne (now called Yanne), Anouk ...

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