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Would it? Yeah it hurts, but, theres going to be thrashing around and jamming a fingernail into a cuticle doesn't sound like it would be easy to pull off. Theres ...

Well, in my book D&D plus Anime does equal nerd. Not all stereotypes are true, but theres always some truth in them. Like, the other day I saw an asian ...

Why does it matter?

You'll probably want to change this to either third person or past tense. The first person present tense rings of online RP boards which do not by any means equal ...

This is a good start, but your missing a lot of information that would make us think this was fiction. I felt like I should be watching a documentary while ...

This has a good whispey flow too it. Thats how it read to me anyway. I didn't get the second to last line "suburbia feels like you won't show up," ...

I like this. There isn't much more that I can say about it. It shows a lot of tallented writing. Lots of understandable descriptions, good emotion, very well done. Good ...

I'm not sure I know what type of writing this is. Its not exactly prose, and its not exactly poetry. So I'm at a standstill as to what to say ...

What?

*hem* No. The hug was for a job well done, regardless of what was in the poem.

I read this over again, post your changes, and I swear the room just got brighter. It makes so much more sense now. Good work, you've earned a hug. *hug*

Yeah, but wait for the counter suit for damages to his name. This could go on forever.

This reminds me of Def Poetry Jam. It has that kind of rythm to it, and it reads somewhat angrily, to me anyway. Pretty good.

Intriguing. The stylized word flow is nice. I'm a big fan of the second stanza.

This has good flow nad word use. I liked the metephores 'n' stuff. (me being descriptive of my most deeperist thoughts and feelings) Good Job. You've earned a hug. *hug* ...