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i ncant nose lamyn p;top. I cant nose my laptop. Though, had this been a regular keyboard, I have found myself to be decent at typing with my huge schnozz. ...

The Prose! THE PROSE!! Is it just me, or is there a vastly superior number of poetry submissions over prose? Develop a plot people! Characters, a protagonist that we root ...

I hate to leave this without a critique, but I find it hard to say anything. Its good. I can say that much. You have in fact earned a hug. ...

Yes, the exterminate at the end, which I didn't actually read, just acknowleged the existance of, is horribly repedative. I'm going to be honest, it sucks. Not the whole thing, ...

This flows nicely, but there are a few moments where the break in the flow is a hinderance to the piece. And you do it in every stanza, but it ...

(OOC: What? You need to give us much much more detail if you're posting in character. If you're lukes bodyguard, which is questionable already, since Luke is a Jedi master, ...

"Whats the point of having such a powerfull thermal detonator anyway? Something that strong would injure the person throwing it just as much as the person it was intended for. ...

(OOC Yeah, I know yoda's dead. Just illustrating point. And Eben Hawk dude... we've all played that game. I'm playing through it now for the upteenth time.) After he was ...

So, can they have freaky sex? Like with condoms and contraception?! And hanging from a ceiling fan? (Thats not allowed in the air force you know.)

(OOC Hey, in the future, don't play my character, I actually had something completely different in mind. If you want to pick a fight, thats fine, but that was completely ...

What you aren't taught is the proper use of contraceptives, and in some places, alabama being one of them, doing so is discouraged. ALL you are taught is that abstinence ...

This isn't quite a sonnet. to be a sonnet, it would need to maintain the abba abba/ abba cddc/ abab cdcd rhyme structure all the way through, and you have ...

All of your pieces are overwhelmingly short. They might be worthwhile if you actually took them and did something with them before posting them. This starts, and then it ends. ...

Humerous to say the least. I don't think this really qualifies as poetry, and I'm sure theres some rule about posting so much all at once.

I don't have any constructive imput to say other than I enjoyed this. The first four lines sets everything up exellently, and is possibly my favorite bit.