LadySpark

Can you give us an example of this cheesy writing? Without actually seeing the writing, I can't really help you-- because I don't know how your writing is cheesy. Is ...

If you chose to go into writing in college, there's nothing that says you have to show a college you've written before then. You can chose your major and do ...

If you decide that you really just want it to be a simple romance story, you can always take the abusive father out. Like I said before, it's a little ...

I'm gonna build on what Rosey said. What I really liked about your plot is the vintage video game thing. It's quite original, I don't think I've ever seen it ...

First, I don't really understand why it's called the Vest Of Knowledge if it just holds stuff. It's not like the vest talks to you, or teaches you something. It ...

As a general rule, we don't delete topics. So, I'm just gonna leave it here, and you can edit it if and when you rewrite it.

Personally, and this is just because I like the names, I like Gregor and Lucine. Just cause they're cool. As for the name of your antichrist.... Azariah - meaning he ...

Could I have one with a rain theme going that has the e.e. cummings quote 'no one, not even the rain, has such small hands'?? Please and thank you!

That's not true! You've got a good start here, it just needs to be less ranty, more facty. ;)

@Zolen so you're saying that the only people who read romance are teenagers? Do you have any sources to back up this claim? I'd love to read them, because I'm ...

@Zolen, so in your opinion, if this is the way romance works, how is the romance genre still alive and working? If as you claim, it's boring and not worth ...

I don't like how through your whole review, you take pieces of what I said, and rant about them, when indeed, I gave explanations for them, and I was trying ...

Okay. First off, 1). To create friction in a relationship that developed too fast. I'm not sure where you're getting your information, but another relationship developing too fast has absolutely ...

oh there's a dt thread good to know

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