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Re: The Act - 2
Hi Hibiscus. I think this poem is cute. I was chasing a fading light as it gushed away in a n showering sunset Creativefreak pointed out some good parts. So ...
Aug 12, 2010 -
Re: The problem with creating a masterpiece
The canvas is blank, "Is" sounds better in that sentence. But the real story, It's not so easy, For motivation Can be quite sleazy. That doesn't flow too well for ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: Wrote this when one of my best friends' dad died in the war
Hey AspiringAuthor. I like the imagery. I also think it's nice that you're writing it because a friends' dad died. For you there is Eternal cold silence, And twilight drooping ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: smiley!!
:@ :# :! ) :% :* ( I threw those together. ;P
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: Avatar FanFiction
I had bumped into her, apologized, and upon realizing who she was, launched into a volley of questions. “Yes comma Makensi.” “So you're going to be an avatar driver?” “Yes ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: "Keys in Broken Locks"
Hey there Persephoneia. I'll be reviewing your poem today! I’m so sorry for your heart. I thought that sounded funny (in a good way.) I hope you keep writing! ~Ladypurple.
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: I'm here with you
Hey there xjpalladinix I know how you felt. My grandpa died last year a few weeks after my birthday. This was really sad and when I wrote a poem about ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: Heaven's Playground
Hey there Howler. I'll be your reviewer today! First off, I enjoyed this piece and the flow went well to me. I found one thing. They wish and want and ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: Just Your Fan
Hiya Trace_Chera. I read your poem "Sabrina" and this and liked them both. I couldn't find spelling errors or grammar errors. oh so blue "Oh so blue" sounds cliche. (The ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: The knife
Hey Tigs. I just found a few errors that need to be fixed. The knife it stares at me Hoping to enter her throat The pain and suffering She may ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: A peom of lines
Hiya Allmixedup. I'll be your reviewer for today. Well all I really have to sya is that you need to capitalize those "I"s. The flow goes pretty well. I like ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: Scarlet Killer~1
I feel like this is the first novel I've attempted to write that has publishing in it's future. For this reason, please be as hard as possible. Thank you~Kit The ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: When the world finally goes silent
Wow. I love the flow and it doesn't even feel forced *gasp*! The emotion is really powerful and the rhythm is good. I can't write poems as good as this. ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: Shoe-Box Blues
Hi. I was guessing that it was a human baby at first but it got a bit confused.... It may be that I don't know what cellophane is. Anger said ...
Aug 11, 2010 -
Re: Crazy
Hey Kitrosemon13. No spelling or grammar mistakes are really jumping at me right now. So all I really have to say is your rhyming feels forced and it doesn't flow ...
Aug 11, 2010
