LadyOfShalott

Overall, I liked this. The only suggestion I have would be to make sure the point of view is consistent. It's a little strange that it jumps from third person ...

Thanks for the suggestions. I plan to go through and tweak things. I usually don't title my poems (I was just using the first line so that I had something ...

I really like the emotions you portrayed in this poem. I think you did a good job of expressing the fear and excitement that come with falling in love. Some ...

I loved you ever patiently— for months, gave you my heart devotedly. But in all that time, could you ever tell how fragile was that gift you held? Every time ...