LOLLIPOPGIRL030

I really liked this. I couldn't see any other errors, other then the ones already pointed out. I'd like to see where this goes, so PM me whenever you write ...

I agree, it was a bit choppy, but I am anxious to see where you're going with this. PM me whenever you write more. ~Nikki

I liked it. It did have some errors, but besides that, it was very good. Keep up the writing! :)