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First off I really like your story and main character. But I have a few suggestions... where thegirlandthepen said to delete the sentence... “We would be delighted!” Jazz gushed as ...

The blazing sun shone down on the stranger making his skin look as if it was well done as a chicken golden after an hour in the oven. He staggered ...

First off I'd like to thank you both for the comments/suggestions. As to your question prepareyourself2 as to why Nora thought to her sister " You think you're funny don't ...

I think this could be a good poem, but it needs to be longer and be more... LIke StoryWeaver13 said it needs to be more dramatic.

I think this could be a good poem, but it needs to be longer and be more... LIke StoryWeaver13 said it needs to be more dramatic.

When the smallest beam of light peeked through the slits of her blinds Nora's eyes pushed open quickly followed by a sigh. After blinking the sleep from her eyes she ...

I really loved the depths that you went to and like Apple said it was a very well written piece .

I think you need to elaborate on what and how she ended up in the suicide proof room. But otherwise I liked it.

I really liked the idea of the whole thing and was very intrigued but you need to go a little more in depth, how did these men come to know ...

I really liked the idea of the whole thing and was very intrigued but you need to go a little more in depth, how did these men come to know ...

Thank you for your review. I see what you are saying,but the fact that her husband is abusive is the reason she wants to leave and as in many cases ...

It is a very beautifully written poem but like Juniper pointed out there are to many somethings. It embodies winter well and the vivid descriptions help the reader feel the ...

Thank you. I appreciate all the comments and critiques they are very helpful. Thank you jaceclayton

I know this poem means a lot to you and I'm sorry it ended the way it did. I wish I could rewrite history and take that pain away, but ...

Although I didn't like the fact that she killed Amanda, but now I don't know if I can really blame her. Amanda is a jerk. She definitely should have gotten ...