Kyuubi

seems it was picked apart pretty good. Many of the corrections have already been made so I couldn't really find anything that wasn't already found. Anyway, I thought it was ...

I like what you have so far. However, like everyone else has said, this is short. If you develop it and add more, this has potential to be a very ...

Helloooo! Welcome, welcome, welcome. You have just become part of the most fantastic community out there. Like Rosey said, you should tell us more about yourself. What sports do you ...

Wow...even in the new thread, everyone looks so good. It makes me jealous.

Hola, bonjour, or just plain hello! Welcome to our little clan. Although, 'little' seems to be the total opposite of what YWS really is. So anyway, like Kaylyn said, YWS ...

I liked the beginning a lot. Like BeckFletch said, it does have potential. Although, I would have liked to have seen the first draft so I can see where it ...

Hey there, Samantha! Looks like everything's been covered so far in terms of Rules and the like. However, I like to say hello to everyone. So, here I am! We ...

Yola Michael. And welcome to YWS. As you can see from the post before mine, we are NUTS! That is the understatement of the year. Don't let our craziness fool ...

Yola and welcome. I know that has been said by everyone, but I like to repeat things over and over. The rules have been gone over, but we can't stress ...

Hmmm...well, this is hard for me. I mean, to set goals. I guess what I want for the new year would be: 1.) Change who I am 2.) Be more ...

It was still is. I might have to make my character again..*sigh*

Wow..I thought I was the only non-greeter/moderator/instructor in here...but I'm not. So anyway, heylo! Like everyone else has proably said, welcome to our family. That sounded strange... Anywho, I th

"Whoa. Guys, look at these." Rhianna slowly lifted the lid of an old wooden box. The group turned and gazed at the box. Rhianna lifted a very old looking book. ...

I thought this was interesting..like everyone else but that just means it's good. I liked the way the story flowed. From the time she was running to when she was ...

It certainly was short for a prologue. I liked it but it could have been longer. Now, I'm not much of a reviewer for fantasy fiction but I'm going to ...