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Re: Sunshine Tomorrow
These are lyrics to a song I wrote. I play this song in my band, Shock 12. Feel free to Facebook us! (Sorry for advertising) :D It was a beautiful ...
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Re: The Cost Of Life
This is awesome! You found a message that proves so meaningful for so many people. That is what great writing does! Your descriptions are absolutely great, and you used the ...
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Re: The Whispering of Seeds
Tragic! This is really good. I love the entire concept of the balloons in there. I think you really struck gold with all of the vivid imagery and anecdotes. Also ...
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Re: The Death of Spring
Really good! Just a flat out good idea, and an even better delivery. It's refreshing to see someone providing some good commentary on topics that America has deemed "controversial". The ...
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Re: The Glade
Snap crackle POP! That was some saucy stuff right there, bro. I liked this a lot. I think we've all been in this situation before, making it easily relatable. I ...
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Re: Grim Door
Deep stuff! If I interpreted the meaning correctly, I agree that sometimes change can be overwhelming in every way. I really like your work here, because I think it's something ...
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Re: What is
This is awesome! If Socrates wrote poetry, he'd have written something like this. Nothing like questioning everything :) Keep it up!
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Wicked the Musical
Some of the best music ever written!
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Re: Time Tunnel
That's dope! I love how it switches between different events and thoughts - kind of reminded me of a few parts in Brave New World by Aldous Huxley. Also, great ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Chillest Remedy
Another project for school. I think the message may have been a tad underdeveloped, but there are some parts I like. Feel free to be harsh! :D In common days ...
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Re: Perfect world
I like this! Although I'll admit I don't entirely understand the message, this poem still proves to be quite thought-provoking. I feel a lot of reversal going on, providing a ...
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Re: The Thief and the Tunnel
Overall, this is very well-written. A few thoughts: The first paragraph could be made a lot stronger with some better word choice to describe John. I love that he was ...
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Re: Cordvac
I'm a fan! The first paragraph as a whole was a tad shaky, but the rest was real solid. Cordvac seems like an interesting character, and I'd love to know ...
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Re: Nevermind them, Us.
Very good! If you hadn't said you were new at this topic, I would have easily thought otherwise. It flows very well, which may be one of the best aspects ...
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Re: This I Believe: Life is Beautiful
In school this year, we were asked to write about something we believe in. This I Believe: Life is a cataclysmic maelstrom of delirium, but at the same time, a ...
Jul 2, 2011
