Kylan

Where is the tension in these lines? What simultaneously pulls them apart as it brings them together? In other words, what sets this poem opposite of prose? Where is the ...

Dreamwalker, It is a difficult task to mediate between philosophic monologue and aesthetic experience. Here, we appear to have a poem which seeks desperately to convey message, to stress conceit ...

Audy - Enjoyable poem, thank you for the read. Great opening line - compelling for its strangeness and negative syntax. The poem also has some propulsive narrative movement - I ...

sometimes I forget who I am. I don't mean in the sense of the blinding rages my father used to experience, not the quiet tears my mother cried either, when ...

I may decide to critique this with a more appraising eye at a later time, but I wanted to finally read through a short story of yours. I found the ...

So I've read through the poem again several times. I return to the title and glean the obvious hint. The challenge I gave you was, of course, to write a ...

Reminds of William Carlos Williams as only a simple poem carrying the weight of the world on its shoulders can. It seems to me that here you attempt to tackle ...

This poem has strong sound and rhythm, which is fitting, considering the title of the poem and the reoccuring motif of cicadas. Also fitting is the play between the words ...

Due to the length, I'm reduced to a line-by-line critique. Have you ever been down to the M82? Where you find whiplashed stars, shattered streams of light that whisp away ...

Hiadel -- I'm coming out of the woodwork for this. So, that's a good sign. Your use of language here was fresh, and you had some great images. I especially ...

So I'll start from the top. Wearing Red No line by line's from me today, I think. Jagged has been very helpful in that regard. I just want to give ...

Navita -- A chance to repay you! Though I don't know if I'll be much help. I liked this. I think it was a well-executed experiment. With poetry, I rarely ...

Hibiscus -- Fantastic job here. A fine poem. I envy poets who manage to say so much in stanzas so small. Or, who are at least comfortable with such slender ...

FrankProchazka -- First of all, I love the Kafka quote in your signature. Second, your avatar strikes in me a certain fear and intimidation. Coming from the guy with Cagney's ...

Holly -- Not bad. It's great to see you writing again, for sure. I think I like the meaning behind it best. This poem definitely tackles some big ideas. Perhaps ...