Kylan

{Ivan} Ivan crouched underneath a palm tree and looked out onto the ocean, watching the waves glisten with crystalline irridescence. The sun was setting. The sea roared. And Ivan felt ...

Hunter - As you said, Saint, he definitely wouldn't be holding the gun around the barrel. How embarrassing! I totally meant butt/stock. Typing one thing, thinking another... As for my ...

Hunter: I will readily admit that I don't know as much as you concerning guns. But I was just working off of the above article and the fact that there ...

I'm just curious... I took a look at and it looks like a good place to get some more critiques, as well as a wider reading audience. But do think ...

Well, she specifically told us the the gun was a Magnum. So... it wouldn't have a silver finish. In regards to Paige loading the gun: that could be the case ...

This was a nice start. At least it was refreshing. The stuff that winds up in the action/adventure forum is generally fantasy outcast pieces and poorly written teenager driven prose. ...

Ivan watched the other children carefully, studying their faces, watching their mouths move frantically, and their arms flail up and down. They gestured. They pointed. They cried. Sobbing in the ...

Name: Ivan Panasenko Age: 16 Specialities: Leading, fighting, exploiting Appearance: Ivan is a short, pale teenager with deeply inset eyes that are brown to the point of being black. His ...

To my knowledge, nothing has ever been plagiarized from the hallowed halls of YWS. And, really, unless you've written something incredibly brilliant (unlikely even for the best of us) nothing ...

Ah, Sade...the original sadist. I find it somewhat disturbing that you wrote about this guy, at least from a speculative point of view. I'm also kinda jealous. Why didn't I ...

Pink Jasmine blossoms fall pirouetting with the utmost grace – like a rigidly trained Russian coryphée, whose toes bleed after every performance: the gun shot wounds of dedication and carte ...

Well, I have to say I enjoyed the first portion of this chapter more than this one, but as always, very adeptly written. However, here you have some lag time. ...

I will not read or critique any of your work because you disobeyed a critical rule here at YWS: you flooded a forum with numerous pieces of your work within ...

Well, my parents have found my achilles heel... They've decided to take YWS away from me for an undefined period of time. Apparently they feel I spend too much time ...

Birds? Jeez, I don't know. I think I associate birds with being free. Like being out of this prison cell hell, for instance. - Booker Lee Doves. Peace. Love. Chocolate. ...