Kylan

I would really enjoy being apart of this, but most of my time and creative juices are being consumed by my novel project. It would be brilliant, Hunter, if you ...

This is good. seems to missing something. Everything is happening so quickly, like you shoved this story into a washing machine on put on fast-cycle. Slow down, girl. I want ...

This is good. seems to missing something. Everything is happening so quickly, like you shoved this story into a washing machine on put on fast-cycle. Slow down, girl. I want ...

Thanks, smorg! Anytime you need me to take a glance at something of yours, wing a PM my way. Without further ado, Chs. 3 and 4 -Kylan

Actually, Golney, "The man" shows up sporadically throughout the entire novel. He's essentially the main antagonist, but the reader isn't ready to know who he is yet. Ironically, Yuan is ...

Actually, the second story is a short. Probably the size of The Oil Fields Are Burning. And yes, that did help... *sinks into deep thought* It might interest you to ...

9/10 Would've been ten out of ten if it didn't have the anime. Love it.

In the past, whilst slaving on novels of epic length, new story ideas have popped into mind and can't be shoved out. The story I'm writing at the time inevitably ...

This is only a single scene from my novel, "Honor", and is roughly the halfway point of the story. If not everything makes sense, that's okay. It's just an excerpt. ...

Sorry, was I too harsh? -Kylan

M'kay. This could use some work. Your thoughts are all over the page, causing little coherency, and, as the others have said, you've got a psycho story line. What? A ...

So...this April will mark my one year membership anniversary. And, geez, a lot of stuff has happened since then! YWS is an incredible writing community and functions only because everyone ...

Good job, here. You had me intrigued for the majority of the story; a combination of realistic dialogue and high-octane action. Some of your descriptions, however, are difficult to follow/read ...

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**Mad>> Ivan thinks Peter is unfit for the job. Why wouldn't he? He's a sociopath. But he wouldn't mind collaberating with him. Ivan just needs to be in control. If ...