Kylan

You'll notice the song that the old woman sings looks suspiciously like a romantic language, instead of a Slavic one. I looked up Bosnian lullabies, found this one, listened to ...

3/10 Insert is such a boring person to be around. -Kylan

thestarseye - Rhyming poetry is difficult to write. It's not necessarily hard to come up with words that rhyme, but rather, it's difficult to produce something that's not laughable. This ...

Care to read? -Kylan

Well, here's chapter one of a new novel I'm working on. I decided I would try different waters and wade into the fantasy end of the YWS pool. Hello there. ...

Perhaps both villains and heroes must work together to defeat a greater enemy? Something otherworldy? Maybe the government decides that all superhumans must be destroyed. Maybe they have a device ...

Perhaps both villains and heroes must work together to defeat a greater enemy? Such as something otherwordly? Or we could take the fight/regroup and squeeze as much fun as possible ...

Eimear - You have something good here. You took a common, well-used idea and twisted it into something relatively unique. The language was good, the imagery was good, and overall, ...

yoha_ahoy - You've taken a common theme and expounded on it with average language. There are some parts I enjoy -- stanza three being particularly fun to read -- but ...

David cries little tears of glass, raining onto celestial tapestries: stars that corrupt the sky like pinpoint screams, punctured by iron spiders. Molotov cocktails breathe to the tempo of dystopia ...

Well, hello there! And welcome to YWS. This has some promise. I especially enjoyed the dialogue you tossed around the group near the end of the chapter. Very professional sounding, ...

Hey Suz! I haven't read anything of yours since your Lit Journal piece. So I decided that it was time to get some good literature into my system. I wasn't ...

Proluge = prologue -Kylan

7/10 Drawling? To each his own, I suppose. -Kylan

You know, Kylan, the history you put up for the Joker is only one version, so if it helps the plot, you can change it and all. I know. I ...