Kylan

Change is scary. -Kylan

Thanks for the crit Angel! Just to clear things up for anyone else who reads this and is curious about the italisized passages: They are from the POV of Charlie ...

It is dusk. The streetlight across the street blinks and flickers like the eyes of people undergoing REM sleep and makes weird, twisted shadows out of the people passing under ...

Penguin - Impressive. This was very rich, very full of atmosphere and passion and love. I enjoyed how much attention you paid to word choice and detail. Also. The end ...

our lips are engaged in a cold war and I can't help pointing my middle finger up at Sputnik – a single pixel on the bitmap of our radar – ...

Jared - As always, excellent. You're really onto something here with this piece. It's been staggeringly successful so far and I have no doubt it will continue to be successful, ...

A/N: The story starts to pick up from here on out. I watch him from behind a tree, with its limbs reaching towards heaven like grocery store owners being robbed. ...

I wrote a stream of consciousness piece the other day and thought you might be interested. Here's a link: That's OK. -Kylan

i have lost my faith in washing machines. you know how when you walk into a laundromat and the incandescent lights are as bright as the soul of a child ...

Angel - At first I wanted to tell you to ask a mod to move this over to scripts, but after I actually read it, I discovered that it is ...

I don't care if it means absolutely nothing, this just sounds right. With a poem like this, you gotta shove technique and deeper, existential meaning aside and just listen to ...

Conrad - This was better than what you had written previously. You had much more action, much more conflict, and reasonable dialogue. However, I must be truthful with you, because ...

Yeah, the italisizing here on YWS doesn't work very well if you want to italisize entire pages, but I intended the whole beginning scene to be i 'd :wink: . ...

Light was diffusing through Saint Peter's body . He stared at me as I sat on the pew with Father Caroll beside me, just like everybody else when they see ...

Okay. This was good. Definately a different writing style, but effective and solid as Conrad pointed out. It's one of those peices I hate to read because you leave nothing ...