Kylan

Your title is misspelled. Veiw should be view. -Kylan

[hillcrest orchard] he thinks that he is a man, even now but he doesn't even have hair on his upper lip yet there is only cactus stubble and wishes. he ...

I think the amount of text you've posted is just to intimidating for critiquing. Consider sizing things down. Remember, the recommended word count for any piece of writing here is ...

Conrad - Again, you've given us a very solid chapter. Nothing much I could pick out, because, as Jiggity says, all Creep really does is fall to his knees and ...

A/N: Those of you who know Spanish are going to have to help me out here as time progresses. There are only three or four words of Spanish in this ...

1) When did you join YWS? The 21st of April, 2007 2) Did you try out any other writing sites before you joined YWS? Yes. 2.1) If you answered yes, ...

Conrad - This was a good chapter. You've enlightened us a little more in regards to Creep's psyche and mentality. Now we see that his psychological complexes are more twisted ...

Conrad - Very nice. Definately a chapter with some awesome dialogue and characterization. Concetta is suberbly written. [when secondary characters attack!] However, because Concetta is such a strong f

Conrad - Once again, I am here in the wreckage of what five very experienced individuals have left smoking ^_^. I like what's been written. And I think it was ...

The character whose POV this is written from has been building up inside me for a while now and so I decided to uncage him for a little and see ...

Conrad - I'm not going to be giving a line by line critique or even much of a stylistic critique because you've had a lot of well-thought out and well-placed ...

Thanks, all. The story is set in the 1960s just for everyone's information. Jiggity >> I will be trying my best to keep things lean, I really will. -Kylan

Amen, brothah! -Kylan

The ground is chapped. It is all cracked up and rough, like crocodile skin made into fancy lady's boots and the dying sun paints it red. Railroad tracks run through ...

Jared - Ooooh. This is intense. I really enjoyed how you set things up. Very effecient and lean and mean. As always, a wonderful job. [the devil's gone down to ...