Kylan

In the east, the black hills hold the sun in their lap like the head of a dying comrade. The clouds fill out, fanning against the sky. There is a ...

Jared -- This is excellent. A vast improvement compared to some of your other poems. You have grasped the intricasies of imagery and ambiguous language. It was really refreshing to ...

(A/N: So here is my 'minimalist' piece, as promised. Gotta warn you though, I didn't follow my own rules. There are still some rough parts, but I hope you guys ...

So in. -Kylan

Hannah - This was an interesting poem. Though a few of your lines are fresh and stimulating, I think that you're walking a very thin line by using Shakespearean language ...

[dawson] Dawson drank deeply from the bottle of whiskey, his throat muscles bulging and jacking. His eyes were screwed shut. His fingers were cold. His whole body was cold. He ...

Yes. This is an ancient post. You can stop commenting on it. I'm no longer pursuing this piece. -Kylan

Jared - So here it is! Long awaited and discussed! I decided to read it immediately. I like it. I think that your ability to craft scenes of tension and ...

Clo - Ah. Good to read something of yours. It's like finding a twenty dollar bill in a pair of pants you haven't worn for years. This is good stuff. ...

[phoebe] She sat in a rocking-chair, reading the Old Testament by the flinching, pale light of a candle – the shadows contracting, a twist and hump, cradling the sparse light, ...

This is just weird. -Kylan

I echo Blink. Also check out John Steinbeck. Extremely American. The Grapes Of Wrath focuses on America's labor struggle, while East of Eden is a kind of epic retelling of ...

[franklin] Phoebe Winston sat in the cusionless chair with her hands kept neatly in her lap and her spine erected severely. Her mouth was tiny and strict. Her hips were ...

[jim] Jim threw himself into his work with every sinew and muscle and tendon. His whole body plucked and straining, frantically pushing, bones standing near to his skin, like worms ...

Brandon - Nice to see you here! I swear, if you want your writing to improve by lightyears, this is the place for you. People will give an honest opinion ...