Kylan

Hey Mickey, This is quality stuff. I was very impressed. You manage to capture this scene with such feeling and grace and experience. The little details, the characterization, are things ...

Demsy -- Interesting piece! I quite liked it! I thought that your concept was nice and you had a couple of lines that I really enjoyed. Good work. However, while ...

(I can still remember the blossoms of Phnom Pehn. I think about them now. You cannot take this away. Stomachs may shrink, shackles may chafe, wife and children may and ...

apostasy among the tallgrass and in the fields where the forget-me-nots climb sideways, pious and succinct with bees hanging like earbobs from their blue heads, the minister composes a sermon ...

Please do not critique works older than six months without the author's express request. -Kylan *locked*

You can't delete anything that other members have replied to -- if no one else has replied to it, there should be a delete symbol in the upper right hand ...

*tries self* Oh my! I am scrumptious! On so many levels. -Kylan

seasickness meiosis of the moon; splintered on the hump-backs of the new tide – tiny petals of white light water-born, like capsizing paperboats. salt skin and a new coat of ...

Galerius -- Beautiful. This exceeds your other poems both in literary quality and clarity. You have nearly created an epic, I believe. I thoroughly enjoyed the language, the impressions given, ...

Hurm. I'm not sure if I like the sarcasm being kicked around here... :wink: Hello, Shina. Welcome to YWS. We're generally a fun-loving bunch, unless some newbie comes in and ...

Young Gun and Bludragon, please refrain from reviewing works that are older than 6 months, unless otherwise directed by the author. Angel, if you want this unlocked, let me know. ...

Mandorelute -- You have some very nice imagery and language here. I've always enjoyed the colors green, blue, and yellow in reference to literature. They bear such striking impressions and ...

Connie -- A rather uneventful chapter. But I suppose it's necessary? Regardless, and as a result, I don't have much to say about this chapter. Solid writing. The dialogue is ...

“Oh Polly, Pretty Polly, your guess is about right. Polly, Pretty Polly, your guess is about right. I dug on your grave the best part of last night.” Luther sang. ...

gardening hard, green tomatoes hang bald and pious like the sick eyes of a dying man I wait for them to ripen, to blush, shy under the leaves which offer ...