Kylan

Interesting etherees. Like Hannah, I prefer the first two. The third...maybe a little too simple. The opening lines were a little too declarative and blunt for me. In your first, ...

Thanks, Hannah! -- april 4 gaugin little fugues, the equatored chrysanthemums reappear, pink and revived like fainted women by smelling salts, outside on the balcony, the sun cracking the skin ...

Trippy. I loved the first stanza, especially the first three lines. Your second stanza is decent -- though I don't care for your noose simile -- and your third stanza ...

#2 has lots of fun words, and several good images. "Genesis of citrus" is great. I'd suggest focusing less on the wordplay, tone down the verbosity maybe. Because viridescent doesn't ...

Two solid poems. I think I like the second better than the first, although, despite the fact that the second has huge potential, it needs a little tightening. The first ...

Hmm. April 3rd reads more like prose. I'm not too crazy about it, unless it comes from a personal experience/acquaintance, in which case, it holds more meaning, but still isn't ...

You should be proud of it. It's an excellent piece. A little long-winded, maybe, but it has a great taste to it. The story is muted, but strongly present, and ...

april 3 sabbath the flames on each of the wig-wept candles, lined up and schmoozing, like penelope's suitors, the wax droplets pearling like log-split grubs, and the saint's face solar ...

Galerius -- I don't care for the poem itself. I'll start off by saying that. It feels heavy, contrived, and the language used is insipid, for the most part. However, ...

april 2 lilies of the field to John sour nipples of grapes, dusty from the late summer, as grapes should be and clustered in totems, in their purple-robed vulva, three ...

This was good. I appreciate the turn-of-the-century nostalgia and the polluted innocence of this piece. I'm reading A Tree Grows in Brooklyn, by Betty Smith right now, and this reminded ...

A good entrance, suz. I liked the subtle, spontaneous rhymes. And I prefer your second stanza. I didn't much care for "dribble out like piles of sticky notes"...this does nothing ...

"their eyebrows allow no ifs and buts, which is why/I saved the apple pie for myself" Lovely. Made me smile. Delivered deliciously as if it were non sequitur on one ...

Your quest it a noble one. I envy you for your experimentalism. The pantoum has a lot of potential. I specifically like lines like "I am trying to catch all ...

April 1 "uncomfortable as stubble/in a kiss:" You could have done something a lot less clumsy with this! I love it, but it stumbles. Otherwise, an whimsical, flowing poem. Well ...