Kylan

Wow. There's a lot of emotion behind this poem... It strikes me as having a kind of angered/confused/tearful vibe. Did it just come to you? Or is it based on ...

Well, since so many people have been begging to know more about me, have been clamoring for my phone number, and have filled my inbox with queries screaming for xeroxed ...

Wow! That was a fun piece to read :lol: . Your action segments are great and really keep a reader hooked. I've only got a coupla comments... Dreg towered over ...

Hey writersdomain!! As always, excellent. You're description and characterization is very real. I've got a coupla comments... Okay, so why is Creiha having all of these fainting spells??? She only ...

:!: *There is a prologue to this!!!* :!: To: From: President Dair, For the past three decades the Original preservation inhibitor (OPI) has kept us one step ahead of the ...

Adams stared reverently down at the petri cells holding his first successfully injected eggs. The little spits of biomass looked like eyes – hundreds of fragile, half-transparent eyes – returning ...

Good! I've just a coupla comments. There really is no plot. If I wanna read about being a freshman, I'll read my journal (I actually don't have one, but you ...

Leaves shuffled across the simple looking wooden coffins; whispering and rustling like the pages of an old book, breaking the solemn silence and interrupting the quiet sobs. They made their ...

Hello! Just a few comments: What is the Devil's Walk? I gathered it was a street, but if I was judging it by the description of the magnificent sign, I'd ...

Listen to WritersDomain!! Ahe knows what she's talking about!! -Kylan

Hey, 92. Remember me??? Even though you probably hate my guts, bear with my critiques... So... Overall, much better than your last chapter. Your characters all have very distinguishable personalities,

Hey, 92. Remember me??? Even though you probably hate my guts, bear with my critiques... So... Overall, much better than your last chapter. Your characters all have very distinguishable personalities,

September the 6th 2001 10:22 pm Willy's Sports bar, Hollywood Florida The bar was loud and raucous. People were crowded against people, bellowing, shouting, mixing body odor, slopping alcohol down ...

Okay, I've got quite a few comments about this chapter. First off, you need to be consistent with your narration. Half of the time you narrarate the story like it's ...

I definately agree with Meevs. That stanza makes no sense. Then again, poetry doesn't need to make sense. However, my advice is to cut it out. The poem is fantastic ...