Kylan

Well... Kinda plotless at the moment...Hopefully it will get better. It seems, though, that this is sort of "dream" write. Meaning, you present a situation which isn't very realistic/too perfect. ...

Photahraphy. I discovered the manual and digital a while back and have discovered that I'm quite good at finding obscure angles and making pictures art. Of course... I'm only dabbling ...

Actually, to all those wondering if their will be a part 2...probably not. This is actually a piece of a novella that I wrote about a school shooting. It was ...

Eh. Just felt like it... -Kylan

Hmmm...This could use some work.... I'm going to be honest, but hopefully not too harsh with you. This story reminds me of a watered down Nancy Drew spin-off mixed in ...

5/10...whatever...

Yeah. Keep practicing :wink:. -Kylan

Hey Gena!! Glad you found some time to post another piece. You really have talent!!! I only have a coople comments... First off, you are missing a lot of commas. ...

Woot! Stick it to the man Lady Pirate! Anywyas, now that that's done with... It was very short. Quotes are short. The back of cereal boxes are short. Poems, in ...

These blackened skies wrought by blackened hearts... The cloud of debris hangs over like a spirit Warning Hinting At the evil of the world How could they do it? Celestial ...

This was very good! Your style is smooth and flowing and gives the reader a very clear image of what was going on. Your characters so far are believable and ...

I agree with everything said here. I think young Paoloni has something going for him, but his overwhelming description and flood of obscure words from the far reaches of the ...

You have a fantastic writing style! Very fresh. Very gripping. Very real. Everything that was mentioned in this piece was relatable. Especially the part about the whiteheads and zits and ...

I thought this was fantastic!! In my opinion much more masterfully done than your prologue! Your style of writing is very intriguing and you rarely tell (a good thing. Something ...

I thought this was fantastic!! In my opinion much more masterfully done than your prologue! Your style of writing is very intriguing and you rarely tell (a good thing. Something ...