Kylan

I think the best ways to write a flashback is to treat it as it's own chapter or have it in italics. I've also seen it where the title of ...

Did you mention Oregon? Go there. The scenery is excellent. Can't say much for the schools themselves though, seeing as I've never been. But if you truly want America, go ...

It's kind of annoying... -Kylan

I liked this. You know what you're talking about (or at least faking it very well) and that's refreshing. It shows a dedication to your work. Keep it up. The ...

Don't even introduce the character's past memories as a flashback. Finish up your scene/chapter and then begin with the flashback. No intro, no swimmy screen. It's just there. And then ...

This was actually very good. I'm impressed with your style of writing and - until the last portion of the story - your grasp of the show-don't-tell concept. Your description ...

Uncle Tom's Cabin by Harriet Beecher Stowe. I'm re-reading it for a school assignment. I like it. Stowe is a good author. -Kylan

He's gonna die. I'm calling it. -Kylan

I wrote a story like this. It was a novella about a school shooting and I would narrate in first person for the crazy messed up fiteen year old kid ...

I liked this. You're description is wonderful and true-to-life. Your voice also stands out as sarcastic and cynical. Booker Lee sat at the wheel of his Mercedes silently as he ...

Thank you so much for the crit! It was very helpful! Did you seriously look this up? That's awesome, it shows your dedication to your story (especially if its correct) ...

Well, here's my crit. I really enjoyed this piece. And I've never actually critiqued a fantasy story yet, so here goes. Characters For the most part, your characters were realistic. ...

This was good. Your description is superb. This is probably my favorite line: The area was now vacant except for the stunted branches that laid piously beside their towering fathers. ...

This brute force thing is getting on my nerves... -Kylan

Hey there! I'd like to start a writing related usergroup. I'm actually advertising it right now. We could team up and be mods for the Suspence/thriller/action usergroup if you'd like... ...