Kylan

Here we will discuss how the seventeen Aum Shinkyo bosses will be assassinated and any other inconsistencies there might be. To make this thing coherent, we need to work together. ...

*Wang can't be killed. That's Sabradan. The first target is Jin Lee as stated in the first post.* “How much longer?” Mark asked, voice stifled by the ski mask, his ...

You definately have a beautiful writing style. Your writing manages to capture an entire scene and drag the reader into it and hold them tight until the very end (how's ...

Question, Sam? -Kylan

Just a reminder, these people aren't teenagers or normal people. They are hardened killers. They are nasty criminals! KEEP THIS IN MIND WHILST WRITING YOUR CHARACTER PROFILE. (Refering for the ...

Setting : Chicago, Illinois 2020 Concept : There are two claudestine gangs - a version of the Italian Mafia "The Mafiya" and a chinese gang called "Aum Shinkyo" - warring ...

Could one of you wonderful mods move this to Other Fiction or Scripts please? Whichever it fits better in. Thanks! -Kylan

Very experimental. If it doesn't make sense, I'm sorry. I tried to describe a situation and a conversation without any dialogue tags. This is actually based off of a real ...

I'll mentor! -Kylan

Beginnings are hard. For the most part, anyway. I personally stew over the first paragraph of any story a week before I actually write it, getting a vague sense of ...

Interesting. I noticed you stated several things that could have been stated in a simpler manner, such as these lines: A bird was flying, minding naught but its own wings, ...

Eh. Don't like it much. The other one was much better. Actually, it's not really the logo itself that bothers me, but the little black heading bars and the bubble ...

Thanks everyone! I will take everyones advice into consideration. I whipped this up in roughly 20 minutes, so it is a rough draft. Cadmium>> Yes, the 'companion' is the gun ...

I think 'The only difference between matrydom and suicide is press coverage" should be YWSs theme song. I've underlined the parts in the lyrics that apply to us as an ...

A five shot Remington with pump action and a plastic magazine is my only companion in these halls. These concourses of rejection - Ad nauseum. Barrels the size of quarters ...